Where Are You?—Oh Great And Mighty Choo-choo: a quadrille poem.

October 5, 2022

Where Are You?—Oh Great And Mighty Choo-choo: a quadrille poem.

Train track, Normans Bay | Photo: Lesley Scoble

Looking up and down the track
Forward and back
There is no sign of you
Where are you?
Oh great and mighty choo-choo.

Looking up and down the track
Forward and back
To left and right
Again…
no sound or sight
of a train.



LesleyScoble    October 2022

Train track, Normans Bay (looking the other way) | Photo: Lesley Scoble

My poem Where Are You?—Oh Great And Mighty Choo-choo is written as a quadrille. A quadrille is a poem of only 44 words (not including the title). This week’s Dverse Pub prompt was to write a quadrille using the word ‘Track’. My thanks to Merrilldsmith for keeping me on track with the prompt.

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7 responses to “Where Are You?—Oh Great And Mighty Choo-choo: a quadrille poem.”

merrildsmith

October 5, 2022 at 12:37 pm

Waiting for that train–the choo-choo makes it lighthearted. But maybe it’s a sort of existential thing–is there a train? Will it ever come? 😏
Thank you for responding to the prompt! (One “l” in Merril.)

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1. lesleyscoble
  
  October 5, 2022 at 12:44 pm
  
  Oops 😬 sorry Merrill,
  Absolutely! It has deep existential meaning 😉
  Thank you! 💕
  
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  1. merrildsmith
    
    October 5, 2022 at 12:46 pm
    
    You’re welcome! 😊
    –Merril.
    
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Mish

October 5, 2022 at 11:22 pm

Hi Leslie 🙂 I like the simplicity of the moment, the anticipation/longing and how the train could mean so many different things we wait for.

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1. lesleyscoble
  
  October 6, 2022 at 1:37 pm
  
  Thank you Amish 😊🙏I love your interpretation ❤️ Waiting for something that may never come 🚂
  
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Tanmay Philip

October 6, 2022 at 10:04 am

Hehe! I love this. My old apartment was near a railway line, and those choo choo trains used to drive me mad. 🚋 🤯

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1. lesleyscoble
  
  October 6, 2022 at 11:27 am
  
  😁 🚂
  I’ve just had a holiday near this railway and I loved the occasional (not a busy line) distant sound of the choo-choo trains. Of course, the sound of the sea was better.
  So glad you enjoyed it Tanmay.
  Thank you ❤️🚂
  
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