Yikes—I’m Poet of the Week!
I have the honour of reading all the wonderful poems submitted to the W3 Poetry Prompt #169, and choosing who receives the Poet-of-the-Week crown. A formidable task!
It’s a true pleasure to read such a wide range of work from so many talented poets—though I always find the final decision a difficult one, with such a rich pool of voices.

My prompt is to write a narrative poem in any poetic form of your choice.

I chose the option of The Desert Island.🌴
Come drift through Wrecked—my poem of hot sun, sunburn, and solitude.
At its core is a companion piece: an audio reflection that carries the poem’s rhythm in waves… and the clap of coconuts.
You’ll find the song waiting below, like a message in a bottle floating on still water. 😁

Wrecked

by Lesley Scoble

Wrecked | Digital ink & watercolour©️Lesley Scoble

Wrecked — Lyrics © Lesley Scoble | Music and vocals commercial licence courtesy of Suno.com

THANK YOU

My gratitude as always to David, The Skeptics Kaddish.
My thanks to Ben Tonkin for choosing me as Poet of the Week for my poem Fantastical Vessel on the Ebon Tide.

My heartfelt thanks to you the reader, for reading / listening to my poem.

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30 responses to “Wrecked: a narrative poem in free verse (& song!)”

  1. Great Lesley – and the musical version is actually beautiful 😃

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    1. Aw, thank you, AJ 🤗 I’m really enjoying playing around with the music. xxx

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  2. Lesley, what a brilliant twist! Your vivid imagery and clever structure create genuine tension before that perfect revelation. The survival metaphor works beautifully. Thanks for setting such an inspiring challenge this week – the sung version adds wonderful depth!

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    1. Thank you so much, Bob. Very happy you like the prompt 💗 I can’t wait to read all the poems! Glad you like the song 🎶 😊

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  3. Loved the twist at the end! I wonder if there will be a wife number 4…? It makes a great song!

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    1. Hee hee, thank you, Heather 😁 I suspect there might be… but, who knows 🤷‍♀️ I’m enjoying song making 🎶xx

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  4. The twist got me! It’s brilliant, I love how the poem flows like a song.

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    1. Oh thank you, Aboli 😊🎶xx

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  5. You’ve got me trained to stop in and immediately press play! What a wonderful composition you chose for the music. Then I read gently along not peeking. You certainly got me today! Wonderful presentation, Lesley. Love this!

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    1. Oh, that’s terrific, Violet! I’m chuffed. 🙏🤗 Thank you so much. xx

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    1. Thanks, Robbie. 🤗💗

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  6. Hehe! Yeah, it sounds like he’s been wrecked before… Poor Germaine!

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    1. Heh heh 💗 Yes, poor Germaine. xx

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  7. Lesley, bravo! I love your poem and the ending… 👏🏼😊

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    1. Thank you so much, O’Nika! 🙇‍♀️ I’m delighted you enjoyed the poem. 🙏💗

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  8. There’s so much happening in your poem, Lesley. You set us up from the off with the aftermath: bones on the shore, a clear sign the protagonist is not the first marooned soul here, nor likely to be the last. It’s a knowing wink that sets up the denouement: survival is relative, and company is limited to the echoes of those who didn’t make it.

    I enjoyed the way the tone swerves from existential to comic with parched throats and absent kitchen sinks signalling thirst and domestic absurdity. Okay, I’m an existentialist, absurdist fanboy so this was always going to appeal but you’ve managed it adroitly. The narrator as a hungover everyman, adrift somewhere between pub and purgatory, is how I’d like to see Crusoe cast: washed up clinging to a barrel of ale – half-full or half-empty depending on mood. but . The shift between literal desert island and figurative isolation is handled with deliberate imbalance that leaves use feeling off-kilter. Again, neatly done.

    I thought the rhythmical lurch between bathos and bleakness was especially well done. Sunburn hurts “a lot”is a childlike understatement in the context of potential death while a crab ambles, seaweed clings, and the coconut, that cruel tropical cliché, taunts from above. The lines teeter between image and joke, survival and satire. The poem has Beckett at its heart but with delivery by The Two Ronnies.

    Then you finish with the kicker: it was a dream. But not a rescue. No, we’re woken not by salvation but by Germaine, the third wife. The only thing worse than a desert island is domestic reality and now that initial wink makes sense. The protagonist is not the first marooned here. Also, “Germaine” is an inspired closing note—her name playing both as character and commentary. She is germane to the poem’s final punch: this isn’t a man struggling for survival on an island, it’s a man struggling for survival in his own life. The desert island is his mind and his life: parched, circular, and cut off by forces he doesn’t understand so what else is there to do but drink and dream.

    As for my own poem, it’s a work in progress. It’s an allegorical tale I’ve had in mind for a while and it’s proving to be monumentally epic.

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    1. Wow—I’m truly stunned and so chuffed by your eloquent review, Dennis. Thank you for taking the time to write it; it means an enormous amount to me. Thank you especially for this line “The poem has Beckett at its heart but with delivery by The Two Ronnies.” I love it!
      I look forward to reading your epic poem!

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    2. To mention my poem and Beckett (and the Two Ronnies!) in the same breath is the ultimate compliment. 🙇‍♀️

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  9. Hilarious poem Lesley. Congratulations on being the POW.

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    1. 😁🤗Thank you, Sadje ☺️💖xx

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  10. Stonehead really said it all. Was Germaine intentional or a happy accident?

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    1. Thank you, Shaun 😊 Germaine was indeed intentional. She started as Joyce in the first draft… then became Elaine in the second… and finally settled into Germaine by the third 😁

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  11. Lesley, I had such fun reading Wrecked! That surprise ending—“my third wife, Germaine”—totally cracked me up. Your mix of rhythm, rhyme, and coconut-induced despair was a joyride from start to finish! ❤

    ~David

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    1. 😁 Thank you, David! I’m over the moon it “cracked you up”. 😁🤗💗xxx

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    1. 😁 Happy you enjoyed it, Christine. Thank you 🙏💗

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