I wrote The Man on the Train in response to Sadje’s photo prompt. My thanks to Sadje for the inspiration. Photo credit: Benjamin Chambon Featured image: I created the featured sketch from Benjamin Chambon’s photograph. My sincere thanks to the photographer. And, as always, my special thanks to you, the reader, for spending a little of your time with me.
A simple poem, but one that perfectly reflects our daily routine and how we sometimes get lost in our phone screens, even when surrounded by people. I liked the rhythm it conveys.
A superb minimalist poem, Lesley. You understand the strongest compression doesn’t mean fewer words. It means making the words perform several jobs simultaneously.
I also admire the way you’ve used repetition to establish rhythm, depict behaviour, create duration and imply criticism. Compression and repetition are working hand in glove.
Your poem’s argument is inseparable from the experience of reading it.
Enormous thanks for this, Dennis. 🙇♀️ I’m new to minimalism, trying to say as much as possible in as few words as possible. Your words mean a lot to me.
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